100wc week 10


THE BROKEN VASE

''Oh no!'' Me and my little sister screamed as our mom's favourite vase fell.
''What will we do now.'' I said anxiously.
''I have an idea why don't we hide it somewhere.'' Said Stacey nervously.
''But where will we hide it all there are too many pieces of shattered glass.''
''Well what should we do now mom will be back soon.''
''I don't know maybe we could put it outside and leave it there.''
''What if we get into trouble.'' Said Stacey.
''I'm home!'' Said mom cheerfully.
''Oh no!'' Shouted me and Stacey.
''What will we do now!'' I said as our mom started walking towards us.

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  1. Unknown17 November 2017 at 20:37

    Well done, you are starting to show consistently with your use of quotation marks. Please review the proper punctuation to use with quotation marks, especially the ending punctuation. You have used the word 'said' several times, is there another word that you could choose to show how someone may reply. A challenge for you now is to have that wow factor in your stories; something that has meaning, makes you think, a story that is memorable.

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